This is my first peer feedback, it discusses 3 good points and 2 areas to improve on im my video, the good thing is all the essentials such as thought beats and lip syncs are all good and too a high standard, as well as a lot of nice footage quality comments, what has been said is that the narrative is unclear, however, these people are not all my target audience and are not expecting and unclear thought provoking narrative as such, so I should take their feedback with a pinch of salt